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A gentle word
Turns into a loving caress
The way you look at me
Leaves me bereft
Of any coherent thoughts
Anything but your smile
In this euphoric moment
I am yours for all time

On to Number Three: Light | Missed Out? Start at the Beginning
©2008-2009 ~Amriah
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I know, I know this is horrendously short but I like it! It's my nice attempt at poetry.


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so pretty........

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why can we change a person but not people?
Thank you =)

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“A word of advice from one Reaper to another,” Kyniel took a defensive stance, “never let your ego get the best of you.”
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Nice poem. :nod:

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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww...nice:D

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"If life was full of only good things what would be the point of living? We as people live through the hard things to enjoy the few good things even more."
hells, not to shabby! every need with help with poetry, yet me know!!!

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Dare you to unlock the secrets of my mind...

Genius is in the details...and I'm going to live up to that!
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OBJECTION! I defy your logic, and everything it stands for!!!

Panton est substructio vero.
This is very romantic... I really, really, really like it!! :D :D :D

:kitty: starts to think of the hottie male :kitty: next door and :blush:s...

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Will do ^^

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“A word of advice from one Reaper to another,” Kyniel took a defensive stance, “never let your ego get the best of you.”
The Realm Within
this is lovely!
and the shortness of it just emphasizes the point you made
it flows beauitfully
and the structure and puntuation and line breaks you chose are flawless!
you should DEFINATELY write more poetry ^^
oh, and i love the vocab you used :)

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Thank you! I honestly did not pay much attention to the punctuation and line breaks or anything. My friend (who is a poet) said I have a natural sense for how poetry flows (at least open poetry ;P)

Thank you for the comment and I see you're advertising Scribe Sanctuary in your sig :D

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“A word of advice from one Reaper to another,” Kyniel took a defensive stance, “never let your ego get the best of you.”
The Realm Within
and you're welcome!!!
i figured i'd tell you WHY i loved it!
oh that reminds me...
gotta go :+fav: this... :)

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yeah i went and checked it out!
i love that place!
:D thank you SOOO MUCH for recommending it to me!!
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and i believe you do,
it just seemed so natural and so not forced, like some things do
and don't worry, i don't have any sense of meter or rhythm according to my friends
but you never know until you try!! :D

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I have a story!!!
Vampire Romance if you're interested
[link] thats the link!!

new writing club,
amazing place!!
[link]
ScribeSanturary!!!
Check it Out!!

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