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Chain Reaction by =Amriah:iconAmriah:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Fixed


Conflict creates
Endless dates
With numerous crates
Of agitation

Frustration employs
Pointed toys
With undeterred ploys
Of sadness

Agony decries
Whatever’s inside
Replacing hides
With numbness

Depression fills
Life with pills
That keep you still
Instead of moving
©2009 =Amriah
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Author's Comments

Words: approx. 38
Lines: 16
Stanzas: 4 (4 lines each)

I'm pleased with this poem as well. Written while figuring out what to do about the potential 8th member of our household. It also shows how I've felt about turmoil and conflict in a home. It always lead to pain unless it's resolved.

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~Angeli-Ii-Demoni Jun 22, 2009, 11:02:36 PM
I'm impressed. I genuinely am 100% impressed. You have no idea how accurate even the symbols used in this poem are. And, yeah, I think you're right. The whole situation has numbed not only the feeling of pain, but also the feeling of joy or love. It's tough realizing this, but I'm starting to realize that is how things are with me right now. Leaving might be the only way to remedy that. I'm still uncertain, though. A little more resolved to leave, just not sure how or what to tell my parents, you know?

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=Amriah Jun 23, 2009, 12:38:08 AM
I'm glad you related to it, honestly.

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~KiNgFRoStY187183 Jun 23, 2009, 3:15:45 PM
Nice I get it. People=stress. more people=more stress.

Sometimes you just need space, and elbow room. I cant say that I understand exactlt what your going through but I do understand the need for room. Good job, the rhyming was clever, nice emotion as well. Good job

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~EnkerZed Jun 24, 2009, 3:39:53 AM
why that's more poetic than poetry

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=illuminara Jun 24, 2009, 6:50:26 AM
Good thoughts. Kinda depressing, but I guess that's the point of getting it out in poetry.

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*Eloquent-Weapon Jun 25, 2009, 11:04:23 AM
Venting poetry is the honest form of poetry, and you did this well. :)

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=Amriah Jun 25, 2009, 11:29:10 AM
Thank you. I think poetry has been rattling around in my brain since I'm editing/publishing my business's first book--a poetry book. :XD:. Ever since that, poetry has been pouring, creating a reservoir in my head. It's weird to be so disjointed and disconnected from fiction.

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*Eloquent-Weapon Jun 25, 2009, 12:04:48 PM
Hey, exploring new horizons is never a mistake.

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=Amriah Jun 25, 2009, 12:40:04 PM
True, true. I just miss my long, detailed, multi-paged stories. :XD:

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