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Tense Assumptions by =Amriah:iconAmriah:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Fixed


A talk here
a word there.
Nothing changes
except our faces.
Truth reveals
our false appeals.
While assumptions
flame hurt emotions.

But no one seems to care.

Promises shatter
everything that mattered.
Denial continues
this tense venue.
Communication fails
to find the trail.
While assumptions
flame spiteful emotions.

But no one has the will to care.
©2009 =Amriah
:iconamriah:

Author's Comments

Stanzas: 4
Words: approx. 56

I wrote this quickly while thinking about some issues that have been building at home. I wish we could all just work it out, but communication seems to fail us. Living with so many people can hurt, honestly. And I know it rhymes horribly; I just wanted to see if I could try it out.

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Mood: Optimism ~SmallAndMighty Jun 15, 2009, 9:27:12 AM
This is a very emotive poem. And one I feel I can relate to at the minute.
And your rhyming works well.
:+fav:
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=illuminara Jun 15, 2009, 2:40:26 PM
It doesn't rhyme too horribly! lol It's good. I think I actually understand what you're trying to say. Poetry is a good way to express emotion that you can't really get out of your system any other way, so I think it's a good thing to write poetry when you feel like it.

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=Amriah Jun 15, 2009, 7:08:16 PM
I'm glad you can relate to it (sort of, because the feeling is very painful).

Again, thanks for the :+fav:.

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=Amriah Jun 15, 2009, 7:09:30 PM
I agree. It definitely expresses it in a way I am unable to do so with prose or journaling. It's like a vent for the feelings, not the facts. The logic stays still, but the emotions flow. I like it. Thanks for the compliments. :aww:

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~Hylicism Jun 15, 2009, 10:07:59 PM
You do a slow dance with the words beautifully~ :)
:iconamriah:
=Amriah Jun 16, 2009, 12:53:43 AM
Thank you! I'm glad you thought so. =)

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=illuminara Jun 16, 2009, 7:23:04 AM
Yup, that's exactly it! I'm not usually a very emotional person, so I guess that's another reason why I don't like poetry too much. :XD:

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=Amriah Jun 16, 2009, 11:33:58 AM
Haha. You're a funny one, that's for sure. Maybe that's why we get along. :XD:

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=illuminara Jun 16, 2009, 11:57:31 AM
:XD: Probably.

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