Harimad-sol's performance during yesterday's laprun trials astounded me. Throughout her brief training, I feared her Homelander ways would make her inadequate. She cut my worries in two as we wove in and out of the other Hill riders. Like a deadly cobra, she struck at the sashes of her enemies. Blues, greens, and golds fell to the sand as Harimad progressed.
My heart pounded and my nostrils flared. My hooves thundered over the desert, banishing my opponents to the dust cloud created by my pace. Other horses whinnied, neighed their heritage, and proudly asserted their rider's skill; but I cared nothing for it. I was Tsornin, Harmiad-sol's warrior horse. None except our King came close to my ferocity or the golden kelar of Aerin's heir that day.
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----- Based off of a suggested journal topic from English class. I'm reading this English book and, honestly, am loving the writing suggestions. So, this is a very brief description of the laprun trials in The Blue Sword by Robin McKinley. Told from Tsornin's point of view. Tsornin, aka Sungold, was given to Harimad-sol by the Hill folk's king, Corlath. Harimad-sol's real name is Angharad, which she hates so she calls herself Harry. Harimad-sol is the name the Hill folk gave her. "The golden kelar of Aerin's heir" is a reference to Harry being the chosen wielder of Gonturan, the Blue Sword. Aerin comes to her in at least two visions that I can recall offhand. I have to admit, this is my favorite book. I grew up reading it over and over again for A.R. (Accelerated Reading program) points from elementary through jr. high. I still read it just for fun, and it is probably my most-read book. I plan on expanding this story, but I have to re-read the book first. I want to be 100% accurate to the story. Comments
 Dang... my warhorse feels like a wimp after reading this.
 Heheh - I like the concept and the atmosphere of this piece. Takes you straight into the culture. Not having read the series, I was left a bit clueless as to what exactly is going on though -is this a race, a competition, a war? May want to clue the reader in a bit with some additional environmental and character descriptions. Overall, nice work!  -- "...Never slander someone unless you want their job... never cheat unless you need money... never hate unless someone bores you." - C.S. Lewis  Interesting perspective. I just have no idea what you're talking about in the author's comments.
 -- "As a nation of free men, we must live through all time or die by suicide." - Abraham Lincoln -- Junior Admin for *TheWritersMeow.  Really good piece, especially since you took it from a different character's POV. I have to say, you got me interested in reading the story
-- Judge me by my size, do you?   very well written!
-- ~Save me from my fears, save my butterflies and love me forever, my beloved Styx~ -------------- Remember we all have =RawEm0tion  I am a proud member of ~lyriclub   This is beautiful and totally makes me want to read more
 I agree with TheStorageGnome - more more more -- Publishing: How to write a Query My salvation and my honor depend on God; He is my mighty rock, my refuge. *Psalm 62:7 Haha, go read The Blue Sword! The author's style is a bit outdated (I think she wrote the book in the 80s), but it's a classic fantasy piece (for me, being 18 and all).
-- Check out my publishing business's first book  Intimate Journey: Battle Scars Haha! I need to make the story clearer.
-- Check out my publishing business's first book Intimate Journey: Battle Scars lol Well the story itself isn't terribly unclear. I just don't know anything about the book/author you're talking about.
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